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Should be ProjectE, and Avaritia instead of Project E & Avaritia (to be consistent with the rest of this book)

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Should be This pack, however, instead of This pack however

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This pack however, expands the mods offered by Divine Journey 1, makes quality of life changes such as way less grinding and waiting for recipes to complete in the lategame, much fewer recipes that involve instability (like Thaumcraft Infusion), much less grind in general, for example, you no longer have to setup the Demon Invasion a trillion times, you no longer need to defeat every Witchery (or Bewitchment) boss a quadrillion times, and quest rewards tend to be a bit more generous this time.

This is a giant run-on sentence that's hard to parse, and also grammatically incorrect. I'd recommend splitting it into multiple sentences.

I added all the improvements you suggested. Only split the long sentence into 2 parts:
This pack however, expands the mods offered by Divine Journey 1, makes quality of life changes such as way less grinding and waiting for recipes to complete in the lategame, much fewer recipes that involve instability (like Thaumcraft Infusion), and much less grind in general. For example, you no longer have to setup the Demon Invasion a trillion times, you no longer need to defeat every Witchery (or Bewitchment) boss a quadrillion times, and quest rewards tend to be a bit more generous this time.